Dear host family letter - brauche Hilfe! :) bitte verbessern!

Hallo Leutz ,
nach vielem basteln ist nun dieser Gastfamilienbrief entstanden. Im nächsten Jahr hab ich vor in die USA zu gehen, muss aber bald schon meine Unterlagen losschicken. Mal sehen, ob ich mit eurer Hilfe meinen Traum verwirklichen kann. Zähle auf euch und vielen Dank schon mal im Vorraus für eure Beiträge! :slight_smile:

Dear host family,

First of all I want to thank you taking time to read my letter. In the following lines I want to tell you something about me. My name is XXXX and I was born on the XXth of January 19XX in Germany. I live in XXXX, a small town in Lower Saxony together with my parents and my smaller sister. We live in a house with a small garden, near the centre.

My little sister XXXX is 16 years old and still goes to school. When we were younger, I always looked after my sister. My parents go work during the day. My mother works in an office and my father is an employee. If the sun is shining my sister and me drive unicycle or go skating for example.

Our family dog (Charly, a Poodle) live with my grandparents in our nearby resident. I visit my grandparents almost daily. I go with Charly and my friends in the nature very often. I think that is missing to me in my year as Aupair.

My friends are named Mandy, Tanja and Juliane. My best friend Mandy is a very funny person and I have a lot of fun with her always. We are very happy if we can together cook or to do a barbecue with several people. I often travel with her, and we spend a lot of time together. My friends describe me as a happy, reliable, self-assured, aboveboard and animal-loving.

I have passed my driver’s license in January 2005. My own car is a Fort fiesta and I drive almost daily. I have experience with driving in snow and I am also experienced with driving at the motorway.

My apprenticeship as a nurse I am doing in the hospital of the city XXXX, this is 45km away from XXXX. I have chosen this occupation because I liked working with people and children. Beginning of the year I took worked a month on a newborn station. In this time I have learned a lot about babies, for example: to swaddle, to bathing or bottle-feed a baby. I think, I work after my Aupair of a children-station or of a surgery-station in a hospital.

In XXXX I live in a flat with Tanja, who is also doing an apprenticeship as a nurse. My daily routine is very different, because I am working in shifts. In regular, I work 7 hours a day and begins everyday at 6 am. We have our exams in 6 months and I am a little afraid of that.

Anyone who knows me knows that I am very happy if I can travel or spend my holiday’s foreign countries, especially the US fascinates me. Unfortunately I had no opportunity to travel outside of Europe. So now I want to use my unique chance! In the US in the year I would like to learn a lot about the country and the people. If I’m travelling in Europe I travel to Spain mostly. Spain is also a country which I like very much.

In my leisure time I go swimming very much. To read is fun, too, but I am enjoying is to spend time with Mandy and my friends at most (I am read at the moment more school books!). I do not really have a favourite book, but I love novels. Sometimes I read all day long if the book is exciting.

I like to listen to music and I love electronic music. From time to time, I also like to party with electronic music because dancing is also one of my hobbies. Otherwise I still like the music of Amy Winehouse, Red Hot Chilli Peppers and Mia.

I would like to thanks for welcoming in your family for one year now and giving me the chance to know how an American family lives. I hope I will become a member of the family, I can be a big sister for one year and I can improve my English. I want to get to know different cultures and to gain new experiences.

I am an upfront with others and I am willing to learn new things, I was very pleased if I could do a year as an Aupair.

Yours sincerely,

XXXX

Danke nochmal!

Dear host family,

First of all I want to thank you (for) taking time to read my letter. In the following lines I want to tell you something about me. My name is XXXX and I was born on the XXth of January 19XX in Germany. I live in XXXX, a small town in Lower Saxony together with my parents and my smaller (kann ja sein, dass sie dünner ist, du meinst aber sicherlich younger) sister. We live in a house with a small garden, near the centre.

My little sister XXXX is 16 years old and is still going to school. When we were younger, I always looked after my sister. My parents go to work during the day. My mother works in an office and my father is an employee (was für einer?). If the sun is shining my sister and me drive unicycle (to drive wird nur beim Autofahren benutzt und dann auch nur dann, wenn du selbst fährst, besser hier ride the uniclycle) or go skating for example.

Our family dog (Charly, a Poodle) liveS with my grandparents in our nearby resident. I visit my grandparents almost daily. I go with Charly and my friends in the nature (go to the woods?) very often (besser a lot). I think that is missing to me in my year as Aupair. (I think I’m going to miss that during my stay)

My friends are named Mandy, Tanja and Juliane. My best friend Mandy is a very funny person and I always have a lot of fun with her. We are very happy if we can cook together or do a barbecue with several (many) people. I often travel with her, and we spend a lot of time together. My friends describe me as a happy, reliable, self-assured, aboveboard and animal-loving (person).

I have passed my driver’s license in January 2005. My own car is a Fort fiesta (das kennen die drüben nicht!!!) and I drive almost daily. I have experience with driving in snow and I am also experienced with driving at the motorway. (meinst du evtl Autobahn? Dann schreibst du das, denn alle Amis kennen die deutsche!! Autobahn oder highway.)

I am doing my apprenticeship as a nurse in XXXX , this is 45km away from XXXX. I have chosen this occupation because I like working with people and children. At the beginning of this year I worked a month on a newborn station. In this time I have learned a lot about babies, for example how to swaddle, to bathing or bottle-feed a baby. I think, I’ll work after my Aupair in a children-station or of a surgery-station in a hospital.

In XXXX I live in a flat with Tanja, who is also doing an apprenticeship as a nurse. My daily routine is very different, because I am working in shifts. In regular, I work 7 hours a day. It begins everyday at 6 am. We have our exams in 6 months and I am a little afraid of that.

Anyone who knows me, knows that I am very happy if I can travel or spend my holiday in foreign countries, especially the USA fascinates me. Unfortunately I had no opportunity to travel outside of Europe. Now I want to use this unique chance! During my year in the USA I would like to learn a lot about the country and the people. If I’m travelling in Europe I mostly travel to Spain. Spain is also a country which I like a lot.

In my leisure time I often go swimming. To read is fun, too, but I am enjoying to spend time with Mandy and my friends the most (At the moment I read schoolbooks the most!). I do not really have a favourite book, but I love novels. Sometimes I read all day long if the book is exciting.

I like to listen to music and I love electronic music. From time to time, I also like to party because dancing is also one of my hobbies. I also like the music of Amy Winehouse, Red Hot Chilli Peppers and Mia (kennen die drüben nicht, erzähl denen was über dt. Musik!!!).

I would like to thank you for welcoming me in your family for one year now and giving me the chance to know how an American family lives. I hope I will become a member of the family, I can be a big sister for one year and I can improve my English. I want to get to know different cultures (besser: the American culture, denn du bist ja erstmal nur in den USA) and to gain new experiences.

I am an upfront with others and I am willing to learn new things, so I am very pleased if I could do a year as an Aupair.

Yours sincerely,

XXXX

Den letzten Satz würde ich nochmal überdenken, denn der kommt besser, wenn du über dich sprichst. Des weiteren würde ich die vielen unnötigen Fehler wirklich verbessern! Viel Erfolg