Bewerbung für die Gastfamilie schreiben..

Austauschschüler Forum Vor dem Auslandsjahr
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Hallo ihr lieben,
Ich werde bald für ein halbes Jahr nach England gehen und ich muss eine art Bewerbung für dich Gastfamilie schreiben, ich bin mir aber absolut nicht sicher was ich da alles schreiben soll und was überhaupt wichtig ist bzw was die Gastfamilie über mich wissen möchte…
Ich habe schon ein bisschen was geschrieben und hoffe nun das jemand hier mir das ganze korrigieren könnte und Verbesserungsvorschläge für mich hat…
Lange Rede, kurzer Sinn, hier kommt mein Text :

Dear Host Family,
First I want to thank you for taking the time to read my letter!
My name name is M*** and I am 15 years old. I was born on **th October in **** in Germany. I am going to class 10 from -*-School in *****. I live with my older sister and my mother in a little house near *****. My Mum is working on school with a disable boy, my Dad is working as an beekeeper and he is living two hours from us. My sister is 18 and she will do her graduation from high school this year, than she will go to a university.
My hobbys are swimming, baking, reading, listening music and going out with friends. When I have nothing to do at home I chat with my friends on the internet, read or play with cat.
Now I will describe myself a bit:
When I meet you first time probably I will be shy and reserved . But I think that will change soon when I have gotten to know you. I am a person who is very inquisitive and I like to laugh., but sometimes I am a bit shy and a bit untdily. I think that I am an uncomplicated person and a normal teenage girl.
I think I am good with childs and I am not allergic or afraid to pets or something else. I have asthma but that is not a big thing for me, sometimes I need my spray and that is all.
I want to do this exchange because I think this a good chance to improve my english and see other lifestyles or other cultures than ours in Germany.
I would like to stay for 6 month in the time from April until August.
I am really excited to live with you.
Thank you very much to thinking about to hosting me. I would love to hear of you!

I hope we meet us soon and I am sure we will have a great time together.

Greetings and with the best wishes from Germany,
M***

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Also so insgesamt gefällt mir dein Text sehr gut ! Du könntest noch etwas mehr über dich selbst schreiben, wie zum Beispiel ein normaler Tag bei dir abläuft oder was deine Lieblingsfächer sind, etc.

Und besonders am Anfang und Ende schreibst du so ‚‚aufgezählt‘‘. So I am …, I do…, I live…, usw.
Da kannst du noch ein paar Sätze verknüpfen und passende Einleitungen finden.

Hab jetzt mal so ein paar Verbesserungsvorschläge gemacht :slight_smile:
Dear Host Family,
First I want to thank you for taking the time to read my letter!
My name name is M*** and I was born 15 years ago on **th October in **** in Germany.

My Mum is working on school with a disableD Boy and my Dad, who’s living 2 hours away, is working as an beekeeper.

My sister is 18 years old and she will do her graduation from high school this year, thEn she will go to aN university.

My hobbIEs are swimming, baking, reading, listening music and going out with friends.
When I have nothing to do at home I chat with my friends on the internet, read or play with THE/MY cat.

(Now I will describe myself a bit:) Der Satz hört sich etwas komisch an :slight_smile:

When I meet you FOR THE first time I will be shy and reserved.

I am a very inquisitive person and I like to laugh, but sometimes I am a bit shy and a bit untdily. (Was soll das heissen? :wink: )

I think I am good with children and I am not allergic or afraid to7of pets or something else.

I have asthma but that is not a big deal for me, sometimes I need my spray and that is all.

I want to do this exchange because I think this a good chance to improve my english and see other lifestyles or other cultures than ours in Germany. (das würde ich noch etwas ausführen)

I hope we meet soon and I am sure we will have a great time together.

Greetings and the best wishes from Germany,
M***

So das wars :slight_smile: Ich hoffe ich habe nichts ‚‚verschlimmbessert‘‘ :+1: